Friday Fictioneers – The Light

“It’s true what they say. There is a light. I didn’t believe them.”

“I can manage it. I can almost touch it. Keep going. Nearly there.”

With each step towards the brightness the pain continued to leave John’s body. The pain which had made living so hard.

All of a sudden he was bathed in that smothering light.  A light which offered salvation. A light of hope?

“I can hear voices. I can see people, shapes, things”

As quickly as it had come the light then faded.

“Am I gone? Where am I? ”

Silence. John felt no more pain.

The above is my entry into this week’s photo prompt 100 word challenge over at Friday Fictioneers.

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44 comments

  1. Nice use of the prompt. We both focused on the light rather than the stairs interestingly.

    1. Thanks Claire. Yep, I thought of the stairs, spirals, downward spirals etc but then decided that was perhaps too obvious so went for the light. I will now go and have a read of yours!

    2. Focusing on the light tells a lot about you two!

  2. I’ve read a couple of the mini stories based off this picture in various blogs- Interesting interpretation!

    1. The light grabs your eye the more you look at the picture. Thanks for commenting.

  3. Interesting take on it.
    Well done.

    1. Cheers Brian. Much appreciated.

  4. But what is the darkness…

    1. It’s whatever you think it is. For me there are a couple of options. Death being one.

      1. I took it as death, too.

  5. I’m wondering where he is if there’s nothing around him. Nicely hanging ending.

    janet

    1. Thanks Janet. Yes, I like the ending too. Almost posted the story with a different ending but on review this one popped into my head. Glad it did.

  6. and he went towards the light….to finally be at peace….wonderful take on the prompt.

    1. Wow. My first wonderful on WordPress. I’m blushing. No really, I am. Thanks for your kind words.

      1. Do not blush, you are more than welcome. Looking forward to reading more in the prompts. Well done Paul.

      2. Thanks again.

      1. Three comments but I’ll stick to one reply! I like positive feedback from any source. We all do. However, when I see your Blog and what you’ve achieved in the writing world it makes it mean even more. One of my ambitions when I started writing was to earn respect for my efforts from people whose respect is worth having. Very, very early days and I’m barely scratching the surface of what’s in me but having you make positive comments on my words is extremely encouraging. Thanks Jennifer.

        ps Glad to read that you’re not a criminal.

  7. I hadn’t noticed the ‘light’ until I read your story… Well done to you..

    1. To be honest it wasn’t the first thing I focused on. However, the more I stared at the picture the more it stood out. Thanks for commenting.

  8. I think you blended the light and the stairs nicely. I sense him struggling upwards, but the stairs are just a means….the light. Only to have it go out when he reaches the top? Very E.A. Poe.

    1. Cheers, Steve. Never read any Poe but his work features heavily in a TV show I am watching called “The Following”. Will have to try and read some soon. Thanks for your kind words.

  9. Nice thought we follow the light until we are dead and then nothing. I don’t know if that’s what you meant but that’s what i thought. I like.

    1. Your kind words are much appreciated.

  10. Dear Paul,
    Hard to say much other than echo what’s already been said. I love that you saw the light rather than the stairs. I encourage writers to see more than the photograph. Use it as an influence rather than an illustration. Well done.
    shalom,
    Rochelle

    1. Thanks a lot Rochelle. Means a lot to me that some people out there can see a bit of potential in what I am doing. As I’ve said to others we’re just scratching the surface here, playing with ideas. However, I know with time, practice and encouragement I have it in me to produce work which people will hopefully enjoy reading. One step at a time though. 100 words at a time even. Once again thanks for reading my entry and taking the time to comment.

  11. I liked how it was almost a mash-up of “after the end of life” ideologies – well done!

    1. Cheers “Not Bobby” :-)

  12. Interesting how you turn this into a conversation. I wonder who he’s talking to.

    1. He is talking to himself. To be more accurate they are thoughts in his head while he is still conscious. At the moment I’m not sure whether thoughts in someone’s head should be in quotes. Some authors put them in italics. Something I’ll need to do some research on.

  13. Nice idea – walking towards the light. I’m sort of hoping that the light at the end of life isn’t uphill, though! Great story :)

    1. Thanks El. Liked your jet pack lightbulb changer story. I laughed. Which is good.

  14. And into the Bardot he goes.

    Aloha,

    Doug

    1. I googled that and I’m still none the wiser…help!

  15. Very spiritual, I feel the real story is the one you only hint at, giving the reader’s vivid imagination time to work. For lack of better words I would call that poetry.

    1. Poetry. Interesting. The question I will need to find the answer to is “what is poetry?”.

  16. very nice take on the prompt. i think it’s great that you made use of both the staircase and the light :)

  17. I never found the light to be truthful, i was too consumed with the stairs and the difference from the top to the bottom.

    1. Thanks for commenting Joe. Appreciate you taking the time to do so.

  18. Intriguing. I can’t know the ending, and that is the ultimate question of life.

    1. Thanks for the comment and thanks also for following my blog.

      1. Welcome. Ann

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