Trifextra 75 – In The Line of Duty

prisoner

Sheriff Johnson’s team had everything they needed.

Motive, fingerprints and two eyewitnesses.

One thought filled his mind as he focused on the suspect through the bars.

“Why son? Where did we go wrong?”

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These 33 words form my entry into the Trifextra 75 writing challenge.

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24 thoughts on “Trifextra 75 – In The Line of Duty

    1. paulmclem Post author

      Thanks Jo-Anne. Still a bit unsure how to deal with these 33 worders. Most do little bits of poetry, ethereal sentences, luscious word play etc. I would be a fraud to try that at this stage. Also find it difficult to judge so don’t feel offended if I’m not commenting on yours or others. It’s probably brilliant but it’s another world to me at the moment. Work in progress!

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      1. Jo-Anne Teal (@jtvancouver)

        I know exactly what you mean; I think that’s the entire point of us participating in these challenges. I think I’m pretty darn good with 5 sentences or 100 words but – yikes – 33 words?! Takes me a while to whittle down my word count. anyways, I really liked that you actually wrote prose. Stay true to your style, sir!

      2. paulmclem Post author

        My style. That’s another slight worry. Don’t really want to get pigeon holed as the man who does “that type of story”. However, at the moment I feel it’s better to play safe. Plan is to introduce varying styles and genres over the coming weeks and months. Some will work. Some won’t. Point is I need to try. What’s the worst that can happen? Not much. Thanks for the comments as ever Jo-Anne.

  1. Tom MacInnes (@cobourgcobbie)

    Great mini-story in those 33 words, sir! I am not sure if there is a connection or not but, I grew up in a small town that had a lot of churches in it and, as a result, a lot of priests, ministers and rabbis in it, too. It seemed to me that a majority of the children of our clergy were the kids who were the wildest in high school. Not surprised at all that the Sheriff’s son was the criminal in your piece. Sometimes, I guess, a kid can only stomach so much authority in his/her life?

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    1. paulmclem Post author

      Cheers. Yes, I’m pleased with this one. Had another idea about a series of diary entries but glad I went with this instead. Thanks for commenting!

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  2. Suzanne

    This is great Paul! Love the mood, love the story. These 33 word challenges can be tough, but they are so fabulous for honing your skills. Well done sir! 🙂

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    1. paulmclem Post author

      Glad you liked it Suzanne. Always means a lot when such a respected Trifectan winner finds something to enjoy in my work. Thanks a million!

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    1. paulmclem Post author

      Much appreciated Christine. Stories are what I seem to do best for now but I am going to perhaps dabble in something more poetic in the weeks to come. Thanks for commenting.

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