Every night it was the same for Vera’s boys.
Dribbling, drooling, tears and tantrums.
Jimmy Jnr’s swollen gums and impending first milk tooth was his excuse.
Jimmy Snr was just a rotten drunk.
These 33 words from my entry into the Trifextra 80 writing challenge.
Lovely you dealt two generation’s problem in 33 words.
🙂
Cheers. Yeh, I thought this one fitted nicely into 33.
OH so good, so well executed with just 33 words.
One good excuse & one sorry excuse for a man.
TGIF 🙂
Much appreciated Kir. This was about my 3rd or 4th idea, but as soon as it entered my head it was going to be the one. Glad you liked it.
it was the right choice Paul. The picture hit it home.
Haha! Funny, but teething babies seem to drive even non-drinkers to the bottle 🙂
Confession: I googled teething. A mine of information 🙂
You’ve realistically written of the parallel between these two generations “hitting the bottle”. This kind of snuck up on me. The second reading was when I felt the full impact. Well done, Paul!
Thanks Jo-Anne. Thought it was good to get young and old together. Appreciate the comment.
A great take on the prompt. Two babies together!
Cheers Mike!
What a bitterly funny 33 words!
Pleased to have made a few chuckle with this.
Too funny Paul!
Thanks Joe.
Grr I hate rotten drunks ! Great tale though!
Appreciate you taking the time to read and comment. Thanks!
Hah! Very clever. 🙂
Thanks for saying so DJ. Much appreciated!
Hilarious take on the prompt. Well done!
Thanks Ivy.
Very funny piece Paul. Had me laughing.
Thanks Summer.
Very funny, and the picture is sort of adorable.
Cheers Draug. I got a bit lucky finding that picture. Just a perfect fit for the story 🙂
Great 33 words indeed… but having the gum as excues I find quite low… drunk on the other hand 🙂
Good point!
Loved your take on the prompt. Two generations drinking from a bottle, dribbling, and burping together.
I wonder though if there isn’t a little something extra in that bottle. Once upon a time they used to put a little something extra in teething babies bottles.
Burping would have been too many words otherwise it may have gone in too!
great piece –
Glad you think so Steven.
This was simply adorable!
Cheers Glynis. I’m glad people seem to have liked it.
LOL – I’ll drink to that!
Cheers!
You’re welcome!
That’s pretty awesome. Hope Junior gives up the bottle before he turns into Senior. Thanks for linking up.
Glad you liked it. I’m pleased with this one, and even more pleased with the feedback. Looking forward to next week’s Trifecta!
Ha! Great parallel, and an interesting little glimpse into family dynamics.
Thanks Christine.
Paulie Walnuts! First I loved the rhythm, rolls off tongue and tooth;)
Then you manage to encompass multi-generational issues in 33 words..perfect.
Ah, good old Paulie Walnuts – reminds me it’s probably time to watch the Sopranos again. Great programme. As for my story, I’m glad you liked it. Cheers!
I’m glad you caught the reference!;)
The words and picture are a perfect fit. Nice take on the challenge.
Thanks!