We watched on,
Indifferent to her terror; apathetic to her cries.
From the loch it emerged –
Trailing seaweed; dressed in algae.
A slimy claw ripped at her swollen belly.
We retreated,
Suddenly ashamed.
These 33 words form my entry into the Trifextra 88 challenge. The photo prompt, which you can see on the Trifextra page, asked us to write about a creature coming out of the water. I hope you like my idea.
This piece was my first winning effort in the Trifecta Writing Challenge. I have placed five times in all, but this was my debut appearance on the top step of the medal rostrum! As ever I am flattered that those judging saw something in my work.
Creepy. Very creepy. Well done.
Cheers dj. Appreciate the comment.
Creepy! I like it.
Thanks Emily. Thought I’d buck the Zombie trend!
Agh! Made me do a reflexive protective cover of my abdominal scar.
Good portrayal of the creepy cultists.
Cheers!
Ooh, this is awesomely disturbing. Well done Paul!
Thanks. Felt the picture really demanded a “creature from the black lagoon” type tale. The sacrifice of a young maiden “with child” was just the disturbed icing on my cake of weirdness. I do worry about the way my mind operates at times 🙂
Well, I think you’ve got creepy and terrifying down 🙂
Appreciate your comments Janna 🙂
I think this is the first dark entry I’ve read so far. Kudos for being different!
Sometimes when I get round to posting a lot of the funny ideas have been used up. That and I hadn’t done many darker 33’s lately so one was due 🙂
This reminds me of a story where the citizens of a village had to select one child to be given to a creature who lived in a lake. The creature kept the kids in bell jar on the bottom. Or, something twisted like that. Anyway, all hail your excellent, dark and twisted effort, Paul! Very well done. 🙂
Cheers Tom. Don’t know the story about the bell jar but I like the sound of it. Will need to search it out!
Wow! This turned into quite the horror story. It reminds me of the Creature from the Black Lagoon, except scarier! Nicely done.
Thanks!
Love how you’ve twisted the prompt into a deliciously disturbing tale. Love the image “dressed in algae”. Thanks for linking up!
Cheers Trifecta peeps. Glad you liked the algae line – I liked that too. Thanks again!
Double creeepy Paul
Thanks Bjorn. Appreciate the comment.
Creepily, darkly awesome. 🙂
Thanks Ivy.
Deliciously awful 😛 Loved the take Paul!
Appreciate the comment, thanks!
🙂
I’m beginning to think you don’t ever write anything mediocre and while I’m jealous, I sit in awe too.
Stunning!
You do me too much honour Kir. Still a novice at this game, learning all the time. Thanks again, really appreciate your kind words.