Yeah Write #163 Gargleblaster – Soulmates

never-alone

Entwined in every flake of winter snow,

and all the songs of spring:

Your voice.

Between the scented breaths of summer breeze,

and the crunch of withered, autumn leaves:

Our memories.

I can never be alone;

No matter how alone I feel.

These 42 words form my entry into this week’s Gargleblaster challenge over at Yeah Write. 

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49 thoughts on “Yeah Write #163 Gargleblaster – Soulmates

  1. Jennifer G. Knoblock

    I love these focus points–Your voice. Our memories.–emphasized by the physical form of the poem.

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  2. M. L. Sexton

    Memories of a loved one is what keeps them near. They will always be there, even if it isn’t physical.

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  3. C.C.

    I read this the first time for the beauty of it. Then, I read it again in answer to the prompt question, and the breadth and depth of ‘where it hurts’ entwined everywhere in each season is so profoundly tangible.

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    1. paulmclem Post author

      I liked the idea of ‘hurt’ not being in a specific place, instead it was everywhere, all throughout the seasons. Glad you found it interesting. Cheers!

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  4. QueenOfTheDessert

    Voices are something that really get to me. My mother threw away the only tape recording I ever had of someone I loved and lost. I could never forgive her that. Beautiful work.

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  5. Psych Babbler

    Love the words especially the last two lines: “I can never be alone/No matter how alone I feel.” It speaks volumes…and I love the picture that goes so perfectly with the words!

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  6. KymmInBarcelona

    Love how the voice resonates through the seasons, which will always bring memories around. Also love how the end can be a comfort or a threat. Nicely done.

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  7. jenbrunett

    “Between the scented breaths of summer breeze,

    and the crunch of withered, autumn leaves”

    I feel like a lot happened between that time period. I read this one a few times, I really enjoyed it. And the feeling it provokes.

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  8. Kay

    You have a great rhythm here, and the rhymes really amplify it! Your had me at your first line, ‘Entwined in every flake of winter snow.’ I immediately see an intricately connected snowflake and get caught up in wherever you’re taking me.

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  9. Christine

    Paul, this is lovely! And you claim to struggle with poetry. I love how you pull in so many senses, in addition to the imagery of the seasons. Very well done, and a fantastic gargleblaster!

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    1. paulmclem Post author

      Cheers, Christine. Don’t think I’m brave enough to call this poetry. I see it as more of a slightly ethereal’ish story with a splodge of a rhyme in the middle. Really pleased that people have seen something in it, whatever I call it 🙂

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  10. Sue

    sorry I didn’t comment before – doesn’t matter the excuse I give it isn’t good enough However, just read your gavitar thingy on a comment on my blog – that is seriously the funniest one ever saw – I’d better start paying attention

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