yeah write #194 – Time is Now

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I waited patiently, veiled in frosty shadow, as Mary’s man set out for the mines.  My heart drummed, nervous hands perspired; the only sound, the faintest whisper of snowflakes falling onto the cobblestones. She glanced towards the shadows; the door left ajar.

These 42 words, answering the question, ‘What time is it?‘ form my entry into this week’s yeah write Microfiction challenge.

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18 thoughts on “yeah write #194 – Time is Now

  1. cynkingfeeling

    Oh, a lot of intrigue in this.
    Haven’t seen you around lately, so I thought I’d share a helpful hint for when the grid is moderated again. Any footnotes count against the 42-word limit and mentioning the question within the post will also keep you from getting moved to the voting round when submissions are monitored.
    Good luck this week!

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    1. paulmclem Post author

      Wow, thanks for the tip. I’ve always added a sentence at the end of my posts, simply to explain what it is i.e. an entry into a writing challenge, not to explain what it’s about. However, moving forward I will restrain from doing so for this challenge 🙂

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    1. paulmclem Post author

      Heh, glad you picked that phrase out – had it in my mind for a while. Just liked the idea of somewhere being so quiet you could actually hear the snowflakes falling.

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  2. inNateJames

    How very adulterous! I like how you managed to provide reasons for us to dislike and like the narrator: Mary’s husband’s profession makes me feel like “Aw, man. Don’t cuckold the hardworking miner dude”, but I could relate to the narrator’s young love.

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