Friday Fictioneers – On The Threshold

ff010415“Emmy, don’t go. Don’t leave me on my own,” pleaded Maggie. The pale, translucent skin on the back of her hand shimmered as she raised a smouldering cigarette towards her lips.

Emma-Jo paused to fasten the leather buckles on her green rucksack. “You’re a mess, mum. I can’t handle this, not now. No wonder dad walked out on us.“

“Of course, him, he had all the answers didn’t he?” Maggie winced as she remembered some of her husband’s answers. The bruising on her ribs still stung from the night he left.

Emma-Jo slid the security chain along its silver track.

Maggie took a shallow, nervous drag on her cigarette.


These words form my entry into this week’s Friday Fictioneers photo prompt challenge

16 thoughts on “Friday Fictioneers – On The Threshold

  1. Priceless Joy

    Great example of showing a communication gap between a mother and her daughter. Very sad. Seems to me the mother is in the middle – between the father and the daughter.

  2. gahlearner

    Kids always only see half of the story, don’t they. I guess it is the same between dads and sons as it is between mothers and daughters. I really liked how you described the arrogance of youth in the actions of the daughter, and the forelorn nervousness of the mother in her handling of the cigarette. Great story.

  3. La La

    I took this photo in a nearby neighborhood and wow, I have to say that this interpretation is unusually accurate in that your tone perfectly mirrors the overall mood of the place. Thank you for sharing this!

  4. Margaret

    Tragic story. Well used details to show character. One thing worries me however – I’m just hoping Maggie isn’t about to leave via the door in the picture.


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